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Topic: Transformations in Dreamland - Closing Time

Transformations in Dreamland – Closing Time

By Lily Bunny

“Mark? You’re still here?” came a very gentle high pitched voice. “We’re going to be closing up for the night soon.”

The young twenty something aged boy popped his head up from the shelf of games he was browsing, his slightly tanned skin blushing a little looking over at the sorce of the voice calling out to him. “Um...I will be done soon, Lily. I just need to decide what I am putting back or buying…”

“Alright,” replied the timid voice. “if you need anything, let me know.”

Mark nodded slowly and went back to his fake browsing. It was true he still needed to decide what games he was going to be buying, but he made his ‘maybe pile’ over an hour ago. The real thing he was browsing stood behind the counter fiddling with buttons on the cash register. Mark had been collecting games for over a year now, and was always on the lookout for new stores with fair prices, so when he heard about Dreamland Games he had been Interested in checking it out. It took him a while to make the effort to actually make his way out to the store, but what greeted him there was something  that he never would have expected.

Simply put, Lily, an employee of Dreamland Games, was an anthro. That alone would have been enough to make her interesting, but was far from her most distinguishing features. For one thing, she stood nearly seven feet tall. Her body was covered in soft snow white fur that covered her from her head to her large bunny footpaws. It was true, she was a bunny…for the most part. Though Mark suspected that she might be a mix of something else. He didn’t know many types of bunnies that had long poofy white furred tails   that  nearly dragged the floor. She had the most expressive wide green eyes Mark had ever seen. He wanted to run his fingers through that mane of chestnut brown hair that hung to her hips, closely followed by her long cute floppy bunny ears, which was also covered in that same white fur.

And her body…

To say she was curvy was the understatement of the year. Her tits were enormous! Each was easily twice the size of her head. It looked like she was smuggling twin pumpkins under her green turtleneck sweater. She was nearly equally impressive downstairs as well. Her butt rivaled her breasts in size and were framed by massive hips that brushed the sides of doorframes. Her thighs were also big and meaty as well. Lily’s overall shape was that of an extreme feminine hourglass. The knee length pleated skirt didn’t show off her lower half as much as it could, but you still got a pretty good view of everything. And she was adorable too! She spoke so softly, she was so shy and timid, but still warm and friendly. Lily was almost like a moe anime character come to life….if they were a bunny and was made impossibly curvy. Mark also loved those huge goofy glasses she wore too…so cute!

It was true, Mark had a huge crush on her. She was one of the  major reasons he came back to Dreamland Games as often as he did. He used to make more of his larger spending sprees on his hobby at flee markets, but now he was saving up his money to buy all his games at Dreamland. Its true their prices were pretty fair, but he knew he could save a lot more by getting to flee markets and yard sales early, before the resellers showed up. However, if he got to look more at that beautiful bunny more often, that was good enough for him.   

He wanted to make a move, he really did, but he was completely out of her league. He wasn’t the worst looking guy. He was a little chubby and plain looking. He was able to get dates with normal girls, sure…but compared to the uber sex bunny before him, he stood no chance. It wasn’t enough to keep him down though. Today was the day. He was going to try and at least make some effort to ask her out. He might completely get shut down, but at least he wanted to try.

Mark slowly brought his small stack of games up to the counter towards the much taller girl. Lily was giving him that warm smile she was known for. His face turned red as he scratched the back of his head of short brown hair, his limited confidence draining as the time was upon him. “So…Lily…” he started, his eyes looking off to the side. “Doing anything after work tonight?” He inwardly groaned at himself. He didn’t mean for it to come out as forward as it sounded.

“No, just heading home. It’s been a long day, I’m a little tired.” Lily replied, seeming to have not noticed Mark’s forwardness…or at least ignored it.

“Oh...that’s cool,” he said in a slightly nervous tone. He opened his mouth a few times to get out one of his other questions. The flimsy plan he had mapped out in his head was starting to fall apart. He was quickly losing his nerve. He inwardly sighed as he silently let Lily ring him up, realizing he wasn’t going to make his move today after all.

“I’ve noticed you looking.” She said suddenly, a timid yet coy tone evident in her voice.

Mark’s  mouth dropped open at hearing this. He felt a cold sweat break out on his forehead. “Oh crap,” he thought, “does she think I am some kind of perv?”

Lily giggled at his expression, giving him a calming smile. “I am used to it. You can’t look the way I do without turning some heads.” She kept on scanning in his items as her brilliant green eyes met his. “I…don’t weird you out? With the way I look I mean.”  She said, taking his card and running it through the system. “I deal with a lot of grief due to the way I look.” She said in a soft tone, pushing her breasts up onto the counter, putting them on full display for Mark. “I get so many dirty looks from people who are disgusted by how my body looks.” Her eyes then narrowed a little into a slightly sultry gaze. “but you aren’t like them, are you, Mark?”

Mark’s heart was pounding in his chest, not believing for a moment that this was actually happening. “No way, I…I think you’re beautiful.” He said, letting his heart speak before his brain could talk him out of it. He then saw Lily trying to offer his card back. When he took hold of it, he felt Lily’s warm handpaw atop his own. The two locked eyes as her fingertips lightly stroked the back of his hand.     

“I want to show you something.” She said softly as she slowly pulled her hand from his. She stepped out from behind the counter and stood next to the boy. He hadn’t ever felt quite as small as he did right now, standing next to the giant bunny girl. She then went over to the front door of the store and locked it shut, and turning the Open sign to read Closed. She then turned back to Mark, her eyes locked to his as she slowly step back beside him. She brought a hand down to her skirt, and that’s when Mark noticed something off. The front of her skirt was…tenting. It was huge and had a very familiar shape about it. Mark looked stunned as Lily gave him a sheepish grin.

Without another word, Lily lifted up her skirt, revealing the front of the white panties she was wearing, showing a rather large not so feminine bulge. She then pushed the panties down far enough to show her equipment. A bright pink cock that was semi hard and slowly pulsing bigger. It had started out large at first, putting most male pornstars to shame, and it quickly grew massive as it reached its full hardness. There, jutting out fifteen inches or more from her hips stood an enormous cock that was thicker around than her own forearm with a set of hefty balls covered in her signature white fur. Mark was stunned into silence. He was very conflicted as he saw this. He wasn’t gay, he wasn’t…but seeing something like that attached to such a beautiful creature like Lily, it turned him on in the strangest way.

Lily saw the confusion on the boy’s face and decided to speak. “Surprised? Does knowing that I am not  fully female  turn you off?” she said with a giggle, seeming to already know the answer. “And there isn’t any hidden female bits either, I am all male downstares.” She said with a slight grin.

Mark’s mouth dropped open at hearing this. He thought he should have been disgusted, but hearing that made his pants grow tighter. The Knowledge of her being technically male was just so…kinky to him. “Th-that’s okay…” he found himself murmuring out. 

“Do you want to touch it?” Lily whispered to him. Mark simply nodded and reached his hand forward. He was already familiar with how a cock should feel, owning one and all, but the heat that came from Lily’s member was a bit more intense than he was expecting. The bunny girl let out a small coo as he touched it. He couldn’t even wrap his whole hand around the shaft. He couldn’t help but gently glide his hand up and down the smooth surface of Lily’s cock. The bunny shivered at his touch.

“Mmm, did you know I used to be a guy?” she said suddenly. She arched her back and pressed her hips forward again, giving Mark a hint that she didn’t want him to stop stroking. When he started up again she shuddered with excitement. “Mmm, yeah like that.” She said as she continued her story. “I caught this bug from a girl at a bar. She kissed me, and later that night I turned into…well…this.”

As Lily told her story, Mark started to feel very strange. His mind was fogging over with lust, taking him over. He didn’t think much of that though, given the situation he was in, but his whole body started to tingle…but it wasn’t unpleasant, far from it. A spirt of pre oozed from the tip of the bunny girl’s member, making it easier for him to glide his hand up and down the length. He increased the speed of his stroking, and Lily let out a shuddering gasp in response. However, the moment her precum touched his skin, the tingling Mark felt in his body increased, becoming more like a gentle hum of pleasure.

“You have so much potential.” Lily said, a mischievous smile growing on her face. Her hand had moved to the top of the boy’s head, stroking his hair. As she did this, Mark couldn’t help  but wonder why it felt like he had a lot more hair on his head than he did before. It almost felt like the more Lily ran her fingers through his hair, the more there was of it. Lily then pushed down on Mark’s shoulders, which made him drop to his knees.

Lily looked down at the face of the rapidly feminizing boy. She knew exactly how this was happening, and it turned her on so much. She watched as his hair slowly change color from the dull brown it used to be to a snow white. It then started to become fuller and grow out as she kept running her fingers through it. She also watched the boy’s face soften. Cheekbones became more pronounced, nose becoming more dainty and cute, lips becoming fuller, eyes becoming more expressive, eye lashes lengthened… Even from the angle she saw him kneeling in, she could tell his over all frame was becoming more girly too. Lily’s breathing was quickening, not just from Mark’s stroking of her cock, but also from the sight of his slowly changing body. She couldn’t help herself, she thrust her hips forward and guided the head of her cock towards the feminized boy’s lips.  “P-please, suck it….” Lily gasped out , a look of pure need on her face.     

Mark looked at the large appendage before him. He had a vague thought somewhere in the back of his mind that it might be too big for him, but the strong sexual hum coursing through his body caused him to push those thoughts away. He pressed his much fuller lips to the tip of the bunny girl’s cock and started to kiss and lick the tip. Mark could hear Lily’s gasps of pleasure  as he brought his hands up to her shaft, realizing there was no way he could fit her monster in his mouth, beginning to stroke it while he licked the massive cockhead.

Lily panted and gasped as she felt her balls tighten up. She watched more changes wash over the boy, as two triangular shapes pushed their way out of the top of Mark’s head, pushing its way through his now long silky white hair. She looked down and could see the boy’s shirt tenting in front with rapidly budding breasts. She petted the new fox ears that had formed on Mark’s head as she felt the red, black, and white patterned fur grow out across them.

It was about that time that Mark felt a building pressure somewhere on his lower back. The sexual tingle that was coursing through his body was centering on that part of him. He started to pant heavily, feeling that pressure build and build. It almost felt like his tailbone was about to orgasm. Mark threw his head back and let out a loud cry of sexual joy in a new high pitched girly voice. The back of his pants tore open as, with in a matter of seconds, a giant red and white furred fox’s tail burst from out of him. The giant fluffy appendage was huge! Nearly as thick around as his torso and it looked like it would drag the floor if he didn’t hold it up. The tingling then flared up in his nose and mouth as it too started to shift. He let out a soft moan as it pushed out, reforming into a cute little fox muzzle.

Lily watched all this, all the way up to the point where patches of the black, red, and white fur started to sprout up all over his body. It was all too much for her, she let out a high pitched squeal of pleasure as she felt her cock explode. Rope after sticky rope of white hot bunny seed launched into the air and covered the still transforming boy.

Mark cried out as he felt the hot spunk hit his skin. Everywhere it touched him, he felt the tingle he had been feeling increase by tenfold. He felt the rest of his clothing rip away from him as he too started to feel the thrills of climax take him. He brought his hand down to stroke at his cock, only to feel that it had been replaced with that of a vagina. Mark was now completely female in every way. She felt her body surge, grow, shrink and change in ways his sex addled mind couldn’t keep up with. At one point She thought she might fall over, but Lily was there to catch her and hold her up.

After several minutes of this, the newly formed girl panted heavily, her changes bringing on one of the most powerful sexual sensations she had ever felt in her life. When her heart started to slow along with her breathing, she realized then that something was very off. She looked down to see her vision blocked by a set of volleyball sized tits. Her black furred handpaws reached up to touch them, her muzzle hung open in awe. Lily was there as she produced a mirror for Mark to see her new face.

“You’re beautiful.” Lily said simply, a hint of pride in her voice.

Mark couldn’t believe what she was seeing. She should be angry, she should be freaking out, but the sight of seeing the lovely looking vixen looking back at her had filled her with feelings she never knew she had. “Is…is that me?” she said, her voice shivering a little.   

Lily just nodded slowly. “I should have warned you that that little bug I caught is contagious.” She saw the worried look Mark gave her and she just patted her head. “Don’t worry, you can’t pass it on. Apparently, its pretty rare to become a carrier of the magical virus I caught. Only one and one hundred-thousand people who catch my bug can end up like me. It kind of messes with your head too, makes you super horny for the idea of spreading it around. Sorry about tricking you…” Lily said as she started to walk behind Mark. “I really do think you came out lovely though…” Lily said as she put a hand on…some part of Mark that she didn’t know she had.

When Mark looked behind her to see what exactly Lily was touching, she let out a gasp. Behind her stood the massive lower half of a fox. Her new lower body was a bit larger than her upper torso, making the tail she grew not look too oversized as it once did. “I’m a foxtaur!?!” she cried out. Anthros were already pretty uncommon, but taurs were even more rare. She was going to stick out like a sore thumb.

“If its any consolation, I think you are a super cute one.” Lily offered as she caught a look at something behind Mark. “Oooh, it looks like you have a little something extra too. One to match in front.” Lily put her hand down by the crotch of Mark’s back lower half…and her knees went weak. Lily was stroking something that made Mark gasp in pleasure. She looked down to see that she indeed had a pussy between her forelegs.

“I…have two of them?” Mark tried to gasp out

Lily nodded as she lifted up her skirt. “Mhmm, and its so inviting…” With that, Mark felt something push into her. Something large and hot. She put her hands on the counter in front of her as the two rutted in the middle of the closed video game store. The two kept this up for several hours afterwards.   

The months after that life changing event wasn’t easy, but Mark, now going by the name Izzy, has not only come to terms with her new form, but has come to love it. She doesn’t like the nasty looks she gets from close minded people, but the lustful stares from others sort of balances it out for her. She was a little upset with Lily at first, but Izzy knew that this was ultimately a positive change in her life. She wouldn’t have met her new boyfriend Jeff if it wasn’t for Lily forcing her to become a female foxtaur, after all.

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Sorry Esuna, but I don't think this belongs here. Even with the taur and double pussy aspects (neither of which are executed particularly well), this is a very standard furry TF story. If furry-TF-only stories were allowed, we'd be no different than any other furry site. Don't take this as a criticism of your writing.

I'll let this sit here for a day at most and if no one else disagrees, this thread will be deleted.

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I mean, the only discripter of the forum is "transformation stories". This is a story involving transformation. If you feel the need to close the thread I guess that's up to you, but I feel like there are many stories in this thread that gets to stick around that are just as, if not more, vanilla than this story.

But whatever, ultimately its up to you.

EDIT: Seriously, after looking over the story section there are like...5 or more stories that are nothing but plain cowgirl TFs. Why are those okay but mine isn't?

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Yeah I gotta concur, we've had plenty of TFs in the Belial universe where people end up as anthropomorphic-styled animals. I  don't see how a story like this doesn't belong in the 'Transformation Stories' section, especially when it does involve TG and some other bizarre body modifications.

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Sure alright. Tbh, I don't consider A Dairy Princess' Revenge up to standard but it's become too popular for me to suddenly shut down, and there's the side-benefit of drawing regulars too so I just let it be. I'm not aware of any other simple cowgirl TF stories.

My main gripe here is when a TF is practically only mentioned in passing, and it isn't fleshed out. Meaning it isn't further described or expanded upon (especially during sex). It comes off as rather lazy; you gotta give the imagination something to work off of or it might as well not exist.

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My personal thoughts is that someone adding/contributing is a plus.  Heck some of the earlier belial fic would be concidered increadibly tame by current weirdness standards. 

I will second the bit of criticism from your post Flicker, I do feel the sex is more "and then fucking" and could use more of a fleshing out, as this is a new experience for Mark.  The detail in the blowjob left open an expectation left unfulfilled in the ensuing climax of coitus.  That said I would like to see more.

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I hope I didn't discourage you from future writing. We could always use more authors.

To reword what I said earlier to be more specific, I would just make sure that if you give someone an extra sex organ, they had better damn well use it. Because what is the point of even mentioning it in the first place? That's why, in my mind, the body modification-related TF wasn't "validated", and without it, this is purely a TG furry-taur story.

I refer to "Chekhov's gun":
"Remove everything that has no relevance to the story. If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

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FWIW I'd rather have ten earnest TF stories that I personally don't care for than not have them at all. I haunt LoB because it's a great TF library as much as for the setting.

(Also I would hardly call Dairy Princess' Revenge a *simple* cowgirl story. DPR works so well because of how it challenges and deconstructs the usual cowgirl TFs. It is a very smart TF story and in its own way more extreme than most of what's on the forum.)

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indigocarmine wrote:

FWIW I'd rather have ten earnest TF stories that I personally don't care for than not have them at all. I haunt LoB because it's a great TF library as much as for the setting.

(Also I would hardly call Dairy Princess' Revenge a *simple* cowgirl story. DPR works so well because of how it challenges and deconstructs the usual cowgirl TFs. It is a very smart TF story and in its own way more extreme than most of what's on the forum.)

Tbh, the last time I bothered reading any part of it was years ago. I've ignored it since due to it not being very appealing to me, so I wouldn't know. The 5 cowgirl stories seem like an exaggeration though.

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Flicker, I am honestly sorry you did not enjoy my story. I don’t mind receiving criticism so I can grow as a TF story writer, that isn’t really the issue I had. I was more confused at why you were so quick to delete my story, even when it clearly meets the criteria of the section on the forum. You later gave me criticism for what bothered you about my story, even though you said in your first post that I shouldn’t take you wanting to pull it down as criticism of my writing, that is more than a little confusing to me.  I don’t mean to sound like I am over reacting, but I may very well have to think twice about posting stories here again. It is very clear you didn’t  care much for my story, so if I don’t meet your standards of writing, does that mean its’s going to get deleted? After reading all the posts, it really is coming across to me that you wanted to delete the story simply on the grounds that you didn’t like it. I very much want to be wrong in that assessment, but, just going by these posts, that’s how its coming across to me.

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The reason I personally wanted to delete it was that since nothing was done with the double pussy (that it clearly meets the criteria is tenuous at best), it is an otherwise very standard TG furry TF story, and furry TF only stories aren't allowed on the reason that the site would be flooded with them. I overreacted and I apologize. What I should have done is ask you to expand that aspect of the story instead of outright rejection.

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I will keep that in mind.

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Honestly I kind of feel bad now. I've seriously had a terrible day from start to finish; it's been one of those days.

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I've had those days and I hate those days -.-

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FLicker,

This story was going to be the beginning of an on going series. I'd like to post more of them here, but I didn't want to do it without your permission first. I would keep all future chapters to this thread, so to not clutter the forum up.  Some chapters were going to contain even more vanilla changes, as well as  more strange Belial style changes as well.

KNowing all that, is it okay that I do this? I don’t want to have another issue like before.

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Yeah that's fine. Even if it was multiple threads (like compound37's stories), I just end up editing each one to link the stories in sequential order. It's a little annoying but ultimately not anything to mull over. I can get rid of all the comments too if you want a more seamless thread. I expect that my complaint above will be nullified by future entries anyway, especially given that I thought this was a one-shot.