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FLicker,

This story was going to be the beginning of an on going series. I'd like to post more of them here, but I didn't want to do it without your permission first. I would keep all future chapters to this thread, so to not clutter the forum up.  Some chapters were going to contain even more vanilla changes, as well as  more strange Belial style changes as well.

KNowing all that, is it okay that I do this? I don’t want to have another issue like before.

I've had those days and I hate those days -.-

Honestly I kind of feel bad now. I've seriously had a terrible day from start to finish; it's been one of those days.

I will keep that in mind.

The reason I personally wanted to delete it was that since nothing was done with the double pussy (that it clearly meets the criteria is tenuous at best), it is an otherwise very standard TG furry TF story, and furry TF only stories aren't allowed on the reason that the site would be flooded with them. I overreacted and I apologize. What I should have done is ask you to expand that aspect of the story instead of outright rejection.

Flicker, I am honestly sorry you did not enjoy my story. I don’t mind receiving criticism so I can grow as a TF story writer, that isn’t really the issue I had. I was more confused at why you were so quick to delete my story, even when it clearly meets the criteria of the section on the forum. You later gave me criticism for what bothered you about my story, even though you said in your first post that I shouldn’t take you wanting to pull it down as criticism of my writing, that is more than a little confusing to me.  I don’t mean to sound like I am over reacting, but I may very well have to think twice about posting stories here again. It is very clear you didn’t  care much for my story, so if I don’t meet your standards of writing, does that mean its’s going to get deleted? After reading all the posts, it really is coming across to me that you wanted to delete the story simply on the grounds that you didn’t like it. I very much want to be wrong in that assessment, but, just going by these posts, that’s how its coming across to me.

Tbh, the last time I bothered reading any part of it was years ago. I've ignored it since due to it not being very appealing to me, so I wouldn't know. The 5 cowgirl stories seem like an exaggeration though.

FWIW I'd rather have ten earnest TF stories that I personally don't care for than not have them at all. I haunt LoB because it's a great TF library as much as for the setting.

(Also I would hardly call Dairy Princess' Revenge a *simple* cowgirl story. DPR works so well because of how it challenges and deconstructs the usual cowgirl TFs. It is a very smart TF story and in its own way more extreme than most of what's on the forum.)

I hope I didn't discourage you from future writing. We could always use more authors.

To reword what I said earlier to be more specific, I would just make sure that if you give someone an extra sex organ, they had better damn well use it. Because what is the point of even mentioning it in the first place? That's why, in my mind, the body modification-related TF wasn't "validated", and without it, this is purely a TG furry-taur story.

I refer to "Chekhov's gun":
"Remove everything that has no relevance to the story. If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

My personal thoughts is that someone adding/contributing is a plus.  Heck some of the earlier belial fic would be concidered increadibly tame by current weirdness standards. 

I will second the bit of criticism from your post Flicker, I do feel the sex is more "and then fucking" and could use more of a fleshing out, as this is a new experience for Mark.  The detail in the blowjob left open an expectation left unfulfilled in the ensuing climax of coitus.  That said I would like to see more.

Sure alright. Tbh, I don't consider A Dairy Princess' Revenge up to standard but it's become too popular for me to suddenly shut down, and there's the side-benefit of drawing regulars too so I just let it be. I'm not aware of any other simple cowgirl TF stories.

My main gripe here is when a TF is practically only mentioned in passing, and it isn't fleshed out. Meaning it isn't further described or expanded upon (especially during sex). It comes off as rather lazy; you gotta give the imagination something to work off of or it might as well not exist.

Yeah I gotta concur, we've had plenty of TFs in the Belial universe where people end up as anthropomorphic-styled animals. I  don't see how a story like this doesn't belong in the 'Transformation Stories' section, especially when it does involve TG and some other bizarre body modifications.

I mean, the only discripter of the forum is "transformation stories". This is a story involving transformation. If you feel the need to close the thread I guess that's up to you, but I feel like there are many stories in this thread that gets to stick around that are just as, if not more, vanilla than this story.

But whatever, ultimately its up to you.

EDIT: Seriously, after looking over the story section there are like...5 or more stories that are nothing but plain cowgirl TFs. Why are those okay but mine isn't?